John Richardson
English 1106
Dan Lawson
Monday January 26, 2009
After carefully reading the essay about the changes in professional wrestling, over the past 20 years, I would give it a score of a C. The paper is very well written and has lots of facts about current wrestling and the WWE, but there is little to no facts about the sport back in the 80’s. The author constantly refers back to the 80’s, and says that things were different, but he doesn’t show or explain what the sport was like, or how people responded to it. I fell he just outlined the current sport, and said it is extremely different then what the sport was like 20 years ago. In my opinion he only did half of the work, so he should receive half of the grade so I feel he should get a C. The paper is grammatically sound, but lacks some key information to make it a stronger paper.
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I don't think that paper was "grammatically sound." Even his hook, where he asks the reader a rhetorical question about wrestlers, is missing a question mark. He later goes on to use sentence fragments which reflect disjointed thoughts and makes the paper seem rushed, as if he was writing it 30 minutes before it was due. While the essay does contain information about wrestling, they are not facts about wrestling. The distinction is key; what makes him qualified to tell us anything about wrestling? The author could say that wrestling produces the strongest athletes on the planet but without evidence, that doesn't make it true.
ReplyDeleteI agree that the paper only talks about wrestling in the 90's and not so much about the 80's. Good point, half the work = half the grade.
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